Voices in the Desert

[twilightblade]

Dancing, dancing, through the air,
ashes floating without a care.
Landing soft upon the ground,
whirled up by wind; keening sound.

CHORUS
Their voices cry within the desert,
calling, crying in the desert.
Is the wind just singing?
Or perhaps I'm dreaming?
These voices cry...
Crying in my mind.
*end chorus*

Ashes, ashes... We were made whole,
but this black rain falls into my soul.
All around these voices are crying,
deep within, my soul, is it dying?

*Chorus*

Singing, singing, wind is gliding,
wind flows past me; sliding.
Whistling, dying, against the stone;
Biting deep, mad dog with a bone...

*Chorus*

Keening, keening, wind is dying,
the ashes on the wind are flying.
These voices' words are broken,
or, more often, just unspoken.

*Chorus*
Their voices cry within the desert,
calling, crying in the desert.
Is the wind just singing?
Or perhaps I'm dreaming?
These voices cry...
Crying in my mind.
*bridge*
Calling, crying, in my mind.
Drifting, broken, in my mind.
Flying, unspoken, in my mind.
Calling, silent, in my mind...

[Kage Chaos]

I like it. I'm not exactly a fan of using the same words over and over again, however.

desert, desert (near the beginning and once again near the end)
and...
mind, mind, mind, mind (the end)

Other than that, I really like it.

[twilightblade]

lol. Thanks Kage. But now insert 'desert, desert' everywhere the word *Chorus* occurs.

Thanks very much! Glad you liked it.

[grace]

I kind of like the repeating words, it makes me think of something echoing, and with the mention of a desert it works really good. I like it.

[twilightblade]

Thanks!